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God of War (series)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like comments and feedback to improve this article towards FA, or at least GA.

Thanks, JDC808 (talk) 05:58, 2 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
- In the fourth paragraph of the first section, you need to use either spaced n-dashes or unspaced m-dashes

Done

- I played the first game and the second game years ago, but I believe that there are chests which switches the colour, and if the character grabs the chest in the right time it will stop colorizing

Done You're right. I forgot about those. Checked the God of War Wikia to confirm which games have them. Only the first two do.

- You may add that the sex minigame is censored (at least it is so in the first game)

Done I didn't like the word censored because it makes me think that you can kinda see it, but areas are blurred out or have a black bar across it. I've reworded the mention of it. How is it now?

- A problem is that you use the brackets too much. Try to avoid them.

Done I went through the article and removed as many as I could, unless I thought they were necessary. How is it now?

- Overall I think it is ready for GAN. FLC is not the correct area, but FAC, as it has more prose than list. Similar series are also FAs, eg Age of Empires. Good luck! :)--GoP _T ^C _N 10:07, 11 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

FA is what I meant lol. I had put a Peer Review up for the character page and it used FL which is why I accidentally mentioned it here. Thanks for the comments and looking forward to any other feedback. JDC808 (talk) 06:46, 12 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]