Talk:Tony Renna/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 06:00, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

finishing second at the United States team — for the United States team?
- Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
was driver coach — was a driving coach? was the driving coach?
- Chose the latter option MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Early and personal life

As a child, he was a batboy for the New York Yankees baseball team — When they played in California? Or in New York?
- That is not stated in any of the sources MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Jim O'Bryan ... asked if Renna was interested in driving in Europe — When?
- Added MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - I mean when did O'Bryan ask?
    - Have added that information MWright96 (talk) 19:02, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Junior career

This would be much easier to read if given one or two subsections.
- Added three subsections MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - That's looks far better, thanks.

IndyCar Series career

an agreement for Renna to drive for PacWest's CART team failed — Why?
- The reason was not given by the team MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Might want to state that Al Unser Jr. drove for Kelley Racing when he is first mentioned in this section.
- Added MWright96 (talk)
and to partner 2003 IndyCar Series champion Scott Dixon — Partner with?
- Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a natural point to add a subsection?
- Moved some information to the prior subsection in the article MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Death

without having made any prior collision against the trackside SAFER barriers — Is the significance of this that they were unlikely to be damaged before he hit them?
- Yes, that is the case MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Overall

Looks good, MWright96, very little to point out. A few of the sections do look like walls of text; using subsections, or even adding some more photographs, would help. --Usernameunique (talk) 06:00, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]