Talk:If It's Over/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:20, 8 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

A nice short article for me to review quickly. :P

Infobox: no mention of cassette single later in article. Indicate the two recordings in brackets. Also 'soul' should have a lower case 's'
- I don't quite understand the cassette thing. Elaborate? :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Well you include "cassette single" in the infobox, but there is no mention of a cassette release later in the article. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:49, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"with former and Walter Afanasieff" - missing words
Give either the release date of Emotions or its year in brackets - not both
"Lyrically, the tells" - missing word
"only being featured as an airplay only single in certain territories" - overuse of "only" and is not mentioned/sourced later in article
"Its highest peak was in the Netherlands, where it peaked at number eighty" - highest peak → only chart appearance
The "Additionally" is not needed
34th annual Grammy Awards → 34th Grammy Awards
- Don't you think its makes more sense to link the year of the event and the event as a whole?--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Well the specific ceremony will contain link/s to the main article, but it's no biggie so leave if you like. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:49, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
and on Saturday Night Live

Link ballad
"said the following regarding Carey" - either change the comma to a colon or omit "the following"

"slow tempo" → down-tempo
Link ballad above ^^^ so unlink here
The chord progression will not be A♭-D♭-9, as 9 is not a chord. Check the book and fix
- Removed some stuff. Some was accidentally copied and pasted from another article. I was unable to find info on its key, chord progression etc.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Also see if the sheet music gives any info about the key signature or tempo
The ref given for this information is not cited properly. It links to a sheet music book, not a download
Does the sheet music actually verify the instrumentation and vocal techniques?
- Sorry, the book does.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"According to Nickson" - who?

Change title to 'Release and reception' and include some info about release info such as dates/formats
"Aside from its critical success" - remove
"received a very limited airplay-only release" - source?
You have the wrong chart here. It is actually the Single Top 100

Same thing with the Grammy linking here
MTV Unplugged is a TV show so should be italicised
I wonder whether in this article the live performances section should be placed between composition and reception? That would save on repetition.
- How so? Not sure I understand.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - You could swap the 'Live performances' and 'Release and reception' around (actually retitle to 'Reception'). Then the order is Background and recording>Composition>Live performances (and Release)>Reception. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:49, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - Adding to the above comment: remove ""If It's Over" received a very limited airplay-only release" in the R&R section and then you can retitle it "Reception". Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:53, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure if this table is needed, with only one chart. Leave it if you want, but I would scrap it
- As you probably rememeber from my review on the Anika Moa review, I prefer to keep the charts :P--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 21:15, 11 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That's all for now; on hold for seven days. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:07, 8 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've experimented with the live performances section, which makes for less confusion, IMHO. Everything else is fine, so I'm passing. Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:02, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]