Talk:I Did Something Bad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: (CA)Giacobbe (talk · contribs) 00:47, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

What's up buddy! Article looks good from what I see, should have it done in no time! Just a heads up, most of the comments will be about grammar (I use the Grammarly software for university). Giacobbe ^talk 00:47, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Lead

• Missing comma after "sixth studio album".
• Don't need the comma after "self-assertion,".
• "Swift included the song on the set list of her Reputation Stadium Tour (2018)".
• Don't need the comma after "(2018),".

Overall, lead looks awesome. Giacobbe ^talk 14:04, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Background and writing

• I would rewrite "During promotion of 1989, Swift continued to be a major target of tabloid gossip." as something like Swift continued to be a major target of tabloid gossip during the promotion of 1989.
• Missing comma after "other celebrities".
• "the former of whom was co-executive producer with Swift on 1989, co-wrote and produced nine songs, including "I Did Something Bad". I would change this to the former of whom was a co-executive producer with Swift on 1989, co-wrote and produced nine songs on the album, including "I Did Something Bad".

Great work on the rest, just a few minor changes. Giacobbe ^talk 14:45, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Composition

• "Swift explained that the idea for the production of the song..." Grammarly suggests changing it to "Swift explained that the idea for song's production..." I think I prefer it this way too.
• "On the song" should be "In the song".

Very well-written man. One thing I did notice was that in the first paragraph, the word "song" is used multiple times. Maybe I'd change its use in the third line to "track", instead. Giacobbe ^talk 14:54, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Release and live performances

• "The performance began with the song's intro as the stage appeared in red lights and Swift, accompanied by dancers, performed in front of a U-shaped structure from which a model of a giant cobra emerged toward the end." I would rewrite as "The performance began with the song's intro as the stage appeared in red lights. Swift, accompanied by dancers, performed in front of a U-shaped structure. Towards the end, a model of a giant cobra emerged from within the structure."
• ("Andrew Unterberger writing for Billboard ranked it as one of the best performances of the award ceremony, writing: "[It] was appropriately massive, with brilliantly deliberate pacing, a perfect pause-for-effect after her 'If a man talks shit then I owe him nothing' lyric, and the best awards show use of a massive snake since Britney Spears in 2001.") I would break this up into two sentences. Maybe something like "Andrew Unterberger of Billboard ranked it as one of the best performances of the award ceremony. He wrote..."

The rest is perfect! Giacobbe ^talk 15:24, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Critical reception

• Greenbalt should be Greenblatt.

Great work. Giacobbe ^talk 15:29, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

References

Everything looks good. Giacobbe ^talk 15:41, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Overall

• Prose: Needs minor adjusting
• Referencing:
• Coverage: Every major aspect appears to have been addressed without excess detail
• Neutrality: Nothing seems biased
• Stability: Looks good
• Media: No licensing concerns
• Verdict:

Great job man, just a few minor adjustments on it's a pass! Giacobbe ^talk 15:41, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Thank you very much for the quick review! I believe I have addressed your concerns accordingly Cheers, HĐ (talk) 04:55, 21 January 2021 (UTC)

Awesome! It's a pass from me. Giacobbe ^talk 12:47, 21 January 2021 (UTC)